Temple Admissions Essay
Please type an essay of 2000 characters (approximately 300 words) that tells us more about you. Imagine you have graduated from Temple University. You are preparing to attend your 10-year reunion, and the alumni office has asked you to write a one-page essay about your personal and professional accomplishments since graduation. What would yours say?
Ten years have passed since my graduation from Temple University, where I have successfully achieved my goal of obtaining a Bachelor's Degree in Biochemistry. I am tremendously proud in the academic progress that I have attributed over the years and without any doubt felt that my decision to continue my studies at Temple's Graduate Studies , and furthering the knowledge and experience in the field, was one of my best decisions. Upon obtaining my PhD I felt my knowledge in the field of Biochemistry has been strengthen to its highest peak and I was left confident in that Temple has provided me the most respectable education. Since my graduation I have managed to form friendships with numerous interesting and brilliant people. From the highly respectable professors to the diverse and interesting students, I felt that I was obtaining from Temple University more than education but an experience which has changed my life forever. I was very proud with my continued relationship with Temple's Phi Beta Kappa chapter, where I have acquired many acquaintances and life-long friendships with other respectable students of Temple University, and by association was able to further discover its diverse memberships through its many chapters across the country. I am really proud that by obtaining my education at Temple University that it has helped me to become a better person, both academically and most importantly mentally. Having acquired both of my degrees from Temple, and given my time towards the many internship and research connection it had offered, I has honored with me with the admission to Philadelphia's GlaxoSmithKline division of research and development. Upon my application I was proud to admit that I was a Temple University graduate and knew that with its respectable position in the science field that I would be applying with having acquired a great deal of knowledge and that I would be an worthy candidate for their workplace. Since then I have used the knowledge I have acquired from Temple University and have been effectively putting all my efforts towards the well-being of future generations.
Still working out what else to add, hence the rather short length right now, and also whether specifying the pharmaceutical company's name is a good idea. Not sure if name dropping a brand like Glaxon is something I should do in an essay that is focused on Temple University. Comments and suggestions will be much appreciated!
I have tried some personal revising but I keep getting stuck. I am trying to use more intelligent wording and sentence structure but I am ending up with nothing to add, or sentence that just sound like crap. The topic is just too bs-friendly, which is not a direction I want to go with especially when I am competing with everyone else' essays. :(
So let's see.
You are preparing to attend your 10-year reunion, and the alumni office has asked you to write a one-page essay about your personal and professional accomplishments since graduation.
prompt. This is a rather tough one, and as you said, you COULD bs it, but depending on what you add, this can go many ways. Think about it. TEN years after your graduation. This is also another chance to express how much you know about the school. If possible, name drop some things that stood about and how you may be still involved years later. (Clubs/Fellowships) Or even mention the wife you found at TU xD... how things have changed since then. Just an idea~ if you dare to use it
Too passive. those accomplishments have made you proud. They have made you realize how important the education and experiences you found at TU. They made you realize how much of what you learned there are truly applicable in you career.
Be creative. Don't just passively respond about the school. Talk actively about how it has changed you/molded you/etc. Also include what you did there. Things like how active involvement in such-and-such program has motivated you of ____.
Upon obtaining my PhD the world was essentially within my reach.
Bit cliche. Yes, a good thing to mention, but it seems passive. "essentially" means that you aren't too bold :P
Since then I have used the knowledge I acquired towards my position as a Biochemist at a nearby pharmaceutical company, effectively putting all my efforts towards the well-being of future generations.
Woo for idealistics! :] mention that name. Be creative. Mention what you do. How your work is the most exciting thing ever~ (in better terms) and how you still remember those classes where your Professor explained "such-and-such" idea about biochem:? again, just ideas..
Beforehand I was just another High School graduate with the urge to succeed and years of hard work at Temple and its Graduate Studies have made me a proud holder of a PhD and granted me access to the respectable field of science.
Run-on. high school* lowercase. Before Temple, I had just been a high school grad with an urge to succeed, but the years of hard work at Temple have made me a proud doctor with the knowledge to access a respectable science field. <still a bit rough. But narrow those ANDs.
I KNOW that the knowledge I acquired from my studies at Temple will follow me for the next ten years and many more.
follow me forever* You didn't just study at TU did you? what about the knowledge from internships?/research/etc
whether specifying the pharmaceutical company's name is a good idea.
Would be a good idea. Shows creativity and more thought about what you do.
Anyways, that this essay to a personal level. Think about your high school. What about it has made a difference. The friends? The mentors? The clubs? What stood out? If you can talk about high school in a good light, then college will be 100 times better if you are willing to take the opportunities. Good luck~
Oh wow, you are just too awesome. Thank you!
Thanks for the help, I did some revising and editing and here is where I have left of for now. Definitely is heavier on content right now, which is a definite plus in my opinion. :D
Any further help and suggestions, very much appreciated!
Streamline, make it sleek:
Ten years have passed since I took my my Bachelor's Degree in Biochemistry from Temple University. I am...
I am really proud that by obtaining my education at Temple University I have become a better person, academically and personally. Having acquired ...
Since then, I have used the knowledge I acquired at Temple University and contributed to the well-being of future generations.
With the space you save by making it efficient and concise, you can write some more about your specific goals for the near future and for the distant future. :-)
Thanks! Yeah, I definitely need to learn to stop adding all the bs icing on the sentences and get to the damn point! Haha, practice makes perfect I guess. :)
Yeah, well it is a real art, like trimming Mr. Miyagi's Bonsai tree. Ha ha, maybe that is a bad example. But the point is that we should make our writing like something highly concentrated. Read Stephen King's On Writing.
LOL, Kevin! Love the Mr. Miyagi image, and I find it very apropos.
Loku--I believe the biggest challenge with this essay, as you suspected, is authenticity ("The topic is just too bs-friendly.") It's a tough one, no doubt.
I would actually advocate for more focus on what you have accomplished--giving more color and insight into your research work and your personal life--than a retrospective look back on why Temple was so great. You say that you 'feel proud' many times throughout this essay, and I think it's much less about looking back ("thanks, Temple!") than really looking forward. Temple wants to know about your vision for your future and who you want to be. This is far more telling and challenging of course.
A few tips for some content development:
-Be more clear and confessional on your personal goals. Don't overshare, but don't be afraid to be honest about what you envision and what you want. This is where your humanity and personality and values can shine through.
-How have your rltshps with Temple students and faculty impacted your career? How did they steer your research?
-What have you been working on at GlaxoSmithKline? How has your career taken off? What do you still want? I think this is GREAT to include. Expand on it. Don't be afraid to get too granular, and show exactly what your vision for your future is.
-10 years out is a unique vantage point (I speak from experience). So, I think it is also understandable to communicate a certain degree of hope for what more you want to accomplish.
I apologize if my feedback inspires another overhaul, but I do think this prompt demands a certain clarity of vision. As you said, you'll be compared to other candidates who have their futures planned downed to the last excruciating detail, and there is something very persuasive about this sense of conviction. Your essay just feels too safe. It may not detract from your candidacy, but I don't think it will add value.
This prompt allows AdComs to place students into niches and develop a diverse, talented pool of students. So, I encourage you to push your vision further and show who you really want to be. This is a tall order for a young applicant, I know, but I think you can do it.
Great work so far!
If you want to get in, the first thing to look at is the acceptance rate. This tells you how competitive the school is and how serious their requirements are.
The acceptance rate at Temple University is 56%. For every 100 applicants, 56 are admitted.
This means the school is moderately selective. The school expects you to meet their requirements for GPA and SAT/ACT scores, but they're more flexible than other schools. If you exceed their requirements, you have an excellent chance of getting in. But if you don't, you might be one of the unlucky minority that gets a rejection letter.
Many schools specify a minimum GPA requirement, but this is often just the bare minimum to submit an application without immediately getting rejected.
The GPA requirement that really matters is the GPA you need for a real chance of getting in. For this, we look at the school's average GPA for its current students.
The average GPA at Temple University is 3.51.
(Most schools use a weighted GPA out of 4.0, though some report an unweighted GPA.
With a GPA of 3.51, Temple University requires you to be around average in your high school class. You'll need a mix of A's and B's, and very few C's. If you have a lower GPA, you can compensate with harder courses like AP or IB classes. This will help boost your weighted GPA and show your ability to take college classes.
If you're currently a junior or senior, your GPA is hard to change in time for college applications. If your GPA is at or below the school average of 3.51, you'll need a higher SAT or ACT score to compensate. This will help you compete effectively against other applicants who have higher GPAs than you.
Each school has different requirements for standardized testing. Most schools require the SAT or ACT, and many also require SAT subject tests.
Temple University hasn't explicitly named a policy on SAT/ACT requirements, but because it's published average SAT or ACT scores (we'll cover this next), it's likely test flexible. Typically, these schools say, "if you feel your SAT or ACT score represents you well as a student, submit them. Otherwise, don't."
Despite this policy, the truth is that most students still take the SAT or ACT, and most applicants to Temple University will submit their scores. If you don't submit scores, you'll have one fewer dimension to show that you're worthy of being admitted, compared to other students. We therefore recommend that you consider taking the SAT or ACT, and doing well.
Temple University SAT Requirements
Many schools say they have no SAT score cutoff, but the truth is that there is a hidden SAT requirement. This is based on the school's average score.
Average SAT: 1230 (Old: 1719)
The average SAT score composite at Temple University is a 1230 on the 1600 SAT scale.
On the old 2400 SAT, this corresponds to an average SAT score of 1719.
This score makes Temple University Competitive for SAT test scores.
Temple University SAT Score Analysis (New 1600 SAT)
The 25th percentile New SAT score is 1120, and the 75th percentile New SAT score is 1330. In other words, a 1120 on the New SAT places you below average, while a 1330 will move you up to above average.
Here's the breakdown of new SAT scores by section:
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Temple University SAT Score Analysis (Old 2400 SAT)
The 25th percentile Old SAT score is 1550, and the 75th percentile SAT score is 1870. In other words, a 1550 on the Old SAT places you below average, while a 1870 puts you well above average.
Here's the breakdown of old SAT scores by section:
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SAT Score Choice Policy
The Score Choice policy at your school is an important part of your testing strategy.
Temple University has the Score Choice policy of "All Scores."
This means that Temple University requires you to send all SAT scores you've ever taken to their office.
This sounds daunting, but most schools don't actually consider all your scores equally. For example, if you scored an 1300 on one test and a 1500 on another, they won't actually average the two tests.
More commonly, the school will take your highest score on a single test date. Even better, some schools form a Superscore - that is, they take your highest section score across all your test dates and combine them.
Some students are still worried about submitting too many test scores. They're afraid that Temple University will look down on too many attempts to raise your score. But how many is too many?
From our research and talking to admissions officers, we've learned that 4-6 tests is a safe number to submit. The college understands that you want to have the best chance of admission, and retaking the test is a good way to do this. Within a reasonable number of tests, they honestly don't care how many times you've taken it. They'll just focus on your score.
If you take it more than 6 times, colleges start wondering why you're not improving with each test. They'll question your study skills and ability to improve.
But below 6 tests, we strongly encourage retaking the test to maximize your chances. If your SAT score is currently below a 1230, we strongly recommend that you consider prepping for the SAT and retaking it. You don't have much to lose, and you can potentially raise your score and significantly boost your chances of getting in.
Download our free guide on the top 5 strategies you must be using to improve your score. This guide was written by Harvard graduates and SAT perfect scorers. If you apply the strategies in this guide, you'll study smarter and make huge score improvements.
Temple University ACT Requirements
Just like for the SAT, Temple University likely doesn't have a hard ACT cutoff, but if you score too low, your application will get tossed in the trash.
Average ACT: 26
The average ACT score at Temple University is 26. This score makes Temple University Moderately Competitive for ACT scores.
The 25th percentile ACT score is 23, and the 75th percentile ACT score is 29.
Even though Temple University likely says they have no minimum ACT requirement, if you apply with a 23 or below, you'll have a harder time getting in, unless you have something else impressive in your application.
ACT Score Sending Policy
If you're taking the ACT as opposed to the SAT, you have a huge advantage in how you send scores, and this dramatically affects your testing strategy.
Here it is: when you send ACT scores to colleges, you have absolute control over which tests you send. You could take 10 tests, and only send your highest one. This is unlike the SAT, where many schools require you to send all your tests ever taken.
This means that you have more chances than you think to improve your ACT score. To try to aim for the school's ACT requirement of 26 and above, you should try to take the ACT as many times as you can. When you have the final score that you're happy with, you can then send only that score to all your schools.
ACT Superscore Policy
By and large, most colleges do not superscore the ACT. (Superscore means that the school takes your best section scores from all the test dates you submit, and then combines them into the best possible composite score). Thus, most schools will just take your highest ACT score from a single sitting.
We weren't able to find the school's exact ACT policy, which most likely means that it does not Superscore. Regardless, you can choose your single best ACT score to send in to Temple University, so you should prep until you reach our recommended target ACT score of 26.
Download our free guide on the top 5 strategies you must be using to improve your score. This guide was written by Harvard graduates and ACT perfect scorers. If you apply the strategies in this guide, you'll study smarter and make huge score improvements.
SAT/ACT Writing Section Requirements
Both the SAT and ACT have a Writing section that includes an essay.
Temple University requires you to take the SAT/ACT Writing section. They'll use this as another factor in their admissions consideration.
SAT Subject Test Requirements
Schools vary in their SAT subject test requirements. Typically, selective schools tend to require them, while most schools in the country do not.
We did not find information that Temple University requires SAT subject tests, and so most likely it does not. At least 6 months before applying, you should still doublecheck just to make sure, so you have enough time to take the test.